I need help with my story!!!! I need Ideas!!!! ... I don't know... can someone HELP!?! , Please??

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Tell me what do you think about my story "The rising threat". It's in fanfiction.

"The rising threat".


Please people i need reviews!!, i want to know what people think of my story. To make sure if i should continue or not.

riczhang wrote:I'll try not to sound to harsh but, It's good but it could be better. It could be more well developed, and the characters seem a little off though I couldn't pin down what it was. Also, in 3 words(don't think to harsh of me, it's constructive criticism): I've seen worse/better.

Thanks for reviewing, thanks for you're opinion. That's why i made this topic, because i need help with my story. if you can tell me what else i can change, let me know. And, JEEZ. Like i said I'm not the best writer around, if you can say it that way.

Can someone help me pick a name for Marcos' weapon? A name for a sword, and i'm making it just like Percy's, a pen that uncaps into a sword. I don't think it's logical that Pecy gives Marcos Riptide to difent himself, or is it?

marcos522 wrote:Can someone help me pick a name for Marcos' weapon? A name for a sword, and i'm making it just like Percy's, a pen that uncaps into a sword. I don't think it's logical that Pecy gives Marcos Riptide to difent himself, or is it?

Definitely not okay, as Riptide has a story, but you could give it something like: Xavier. (or just some made-up ancient sounding name)

I merged the 2 topics so people didn't have to jump around between 2.

Please can anyone help me!?! Please??

wht do you need help with?

marcos522 wrote:Please can anyone help me!?! Please??

I can Beta read for you if you would like.

tinkerirock wrote:wht do you need help with?

Tell me what ya think of it. And tell me what you'd to happen next.

riczhang wrote:

marcos522 wrote:Please can anyone help me!?! Please??

I can Beta read for you if you would like.

Thgat would be great!! Do it and send me a PM about it.

riczhang wrote:I'll try not to sound to harsh but, It's good but it could be better. It could be more well developed, and the characters seem a little off though I couldn't pin down what it was. Also, in 3 words(don't think to harsh of me, it's constructive criticism): I've seen worse/better.

Thanks, for me, "not to sound too harsh" IS harsh . Why don't YOU try writing something!!! I'd bet you wouldn't even come up with a starting sentence!!! So don't criticize, OK? I'm trying the best i can, i'm 13 years old, and English isn't my first language (But, i'm bilingual) so don't expect me to put something Rick Riordan would put.

I do write, and this is getting off topic, but at least I gave you a warning, I could've just been like Simon and started off my review with the harshest line. And I do write, and I'm 13 and I have had my writing a poetry published in our School District writing books among other places. Also I write book reviews for our School library, so I know what I'm doing. And I don't expect something Rick would write as he is 1 out of a million.

i agree with the 1 outaa million thing.

i think the story is going out good, but its getting confusing to me. so like a suggestion is like to describe the scene or the people more and/or add different sections;

Just be glad you have ideas! I don't have any.